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I'm going numb
I'm losing myself
I think I'm losing my mind

I'm feeling dumb
But no longer care
Everybody thinks I'm fine

It's just a phase they say
It'll fade away

But what about this, what about me
I want to be left alone, can't you see
That you think it's a problem, but I know I'm fine
What about this little way of mine

I'm looking around
And taking it in
But in no time it's out

Trust me it's not wrong
Just my way of dealing
With everything around

You think I'm not ok
just listen when I say

What about this, what about me
I want to be left alone, can't you see
That you think it's a problem, but I know I'm fine
What about this little way of mine

I just don't know
What to say
What to do
How can I satisfy you?

What about this, what about me
I want to be left alone, can't you see
That you think it's a problem, but I know I'm fine
What about this little way of mine
Just wrote this, tell me what you think.
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AshHughes Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Very good. One or two tiny grammatical things to fix but really nothing to actually worry about!! Really great:squee: never stop writing!!! :woohoo: :glomp:
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isasongs Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks,
I wrote it pretty fast, so there could be some grammatical errors.
Also thanks for the llama!
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AshHughes Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Still great! Wish I had the guts to put my writing like this up!
And you're welcome!! :)
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isasongs Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well I only do it because I know there's nobody I know in real life who sees this, otherwise I wouldn't ;)but thank you.
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AshHughes Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Its cool. I suppose you have a point there. I only know one person on here in real life. And she is a great writer too like you.
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RavensXGirl Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Its so good! ^^
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isasongs Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
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RavensXGirl Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Student General Artist
No problem ^_^
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nhavie Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
I definitely understand the feelings in this poem. You captured them well in the voice and beat that it's written. I love the rhythm it sort of has, it might make a good song.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much, I'm glad you like it!
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