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Left out in a crowd,
music playing loud.
Ringing through my ears,
but I'm far away from here.

People oh they talk,
I'm taking a walk.
Do they know I'm here?
To me nothing is clear.

Take me away.
Where do I want to go?
Don't know what to say
To a place alone,
To a place unknown.

And when I am there,
Feel like they don't care.
They wish I wasn't here.
At least to me that's clear.

Take me away.
Where do I want to go?
Don't know what to say
To a place alone,
To a place unknown.

Where do I belong?
everything feels wrong.
Don't really have a home.
Guess I'll remain alone.

Take me away.
Where do I want to go?
Don't know what to say
To a place alone,
To a place unknown.
Take me away
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AshHughes Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
Really awesome!!! Can relate to it, I love your work! :squee:
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isasongs Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks again :p
and thanks for the fav and watch as well.
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AshHughes Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student General Artist
:giggle: :iconwelcomeplz: again!!
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pinktwirlz Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the style of this :) Even though the sentences are short, I can feel the sadness coming from it. I can't really think of anything specific to improve, except maybe punctuation, such as in the first line of the second stanza, I think it would be better if there was a comma after "people." But that may just be your style, so I won't stop you. ^^
Great piece!
~Madolyn
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isasongs Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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Lovespoon Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Professional Writer
I love the short sentences in this.

:love:
:teddy:
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isasongs Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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starmic Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
i try to use my imagination a lot of times to go to unknow places,i whish i could feel alive

-the dream of all of us go to the unknow,meet new worlds and resert ours,bring the magic of a little kid imagination and use the wisdom of the strong standing-
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xXNotLostXx Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Student Writer
Did you mean from? in line 4 ? This is a great poem/song thing :)
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isasongs Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes :P
Thanks.
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