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You know what i do?
When i'm not talking to you?

When I come back home,
I feel so damn alone.

Trying so hard,
Making a start,
Then falling back again,
Falling back to when,
Falling back to then.

What little things mean,
To me when I'm not seen.

Rethinking everything,
Conclusion defeating.

Trying so hard,
Making a start,
Then falling back again,
Falling back to when,
Falling back to then.

I keep my dreams down,
Break down to the ground.
Pray to get it done,
Help me overcome.

Trying so hard,
Making a start,
Then falling back again,
Falling back to when,
Falling back to then.
I pray to get it done,
Please help me overcome.
Wrote this pretty fast, but it's how I feel.
I know it needs to be better, but this is it.
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:iconfred647:
Fred647 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Student Writer
That's a pretty good love story! I showed this to my girlfriend and she thought it was really sweet! Great job!
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It wasn't meant as a love story. :P
But glad you both liked it :D
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maraqua90210 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I think this is perfect the way it is. It's a bit abstract, but that's how feelings are. It's a beautiful piece that really portrays your emotion!
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you like it
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maraqua90210 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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killerboy6667 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
exactly how I feel lately... exactly that.
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:iconisasongs:
isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's positive yet negative... Thanks tho.
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killerboy6667 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it's a good poem :) I'll give you that, even better is that you put your feelings in it ^^
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Danku
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killerboy6667 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
u zijt welkom :)
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