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Deepest cut so far,
drawn another scar.

My sister sits downstairs,
I wonder if she cares.

Keep quiet to hold the lie,
to hold it all inside.
let it come out in red.
I won't tell if you won't ask,
I'll keep wearing my mask.

Laugh and play along,
I know I'm doing wrong.

Talking with my friends,
they'd never understand.

Keep quiet to hold the lie,
to hold it all inside.
let it come out in red.
I won't tell if you won't ask,
I'll keep wearing my mask.

Falling to the floor,
make it go deeper.
I cut because I hate myself,
I hate because I cut.

Keep quiet to hold the lie,
to hold it all inside.
let it come out in red.
I won't tell if you won't ask,
I'll keep wearing my mask.

Deepest cut so far,
drawn another scar.
Very emotional
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Litlle-Cherry Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013
Sad but beautiful, I love it :)
I especially like these line :
"I won't tell if you won't ask,
I'll keep wearing my mask."
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isasongs Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much.
I tend to write really emotional, so at that time it all turned out pretty dark :P
But I'm glad you like it.
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Caylee-Slansen Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful! It really speaks to me
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isasongs Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!
Glad you like it, also thanks for the badge :D
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Caylee-Slansen Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem :D
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punk0000 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Student General Artist
very nice job on this :heart:
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you like it :D
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punk0000 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Student General Artist
mhm :)
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TheArtistOfWords Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is very good. I see nothing that needs work besides one or two grammar mistakes, but I'm not part of the grammar police, so it's fine. Its very moving, and very emotional.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you like it. :)
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TheAmericanRealist Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
Beautiful piece you have here. Quite sad, but beautiful.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, also thanks for the fav.
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TheAmericanRealist Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
Not a problem at all.
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LiliaKatie Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Student Artist
Great job, it is so emotional and beautiful :D
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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Magicman1998 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Professional Writer
very good!!!!
i loved it!!!
You would love my poems
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
I'll check them ;)
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Magicman1998 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Enjoy!!!
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
Sad but very nicely written. I love the flow.

Keep quiet to hold the lie,
to hold it all inside.


That's my favorite line.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, glad you like it :D
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012
You're welcome. I sure did. :)
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FallenAngel3294 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Student Photographer
This is well written I love this and I feel the emotion and it makes me go back to the times where I have cut
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, and also thanks for all the fav's. I really appreciate it.
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QuillScribbles Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this! :la: I can't rhyme worth crap, it's so people that can I just worship xD
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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MrsHelenaWay13 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student General Artist
I know it was my responsibility to give you feedback, and I apologize that I am so late. But, I need to do my duty!
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I really do enjoy this piece for a number of reasons. It flows very well, and kinda stays in your mind for a while. I would love to see this arranged with music. Another reason, it can connect to so many people. I know it connects with me. I knew that by the end of the first two lines. Also, it's vague, but revealing. I love it.
I don't see much I could really give criticism on. Keep up the fantastic work!
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I really appreciate that.
And I understand that you forgot, mistakes happen right? Thanks anyway :D
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MrsHelenaWay13 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student General Artist
Of course, m'dear.
Thank you. I felt super stressed about it, and now having to run the group while the admin is away... I just had to get everything right. Did you want me to post something for you to read as well?
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MikiraWolf Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I saw that your partner for The Writer's Exchange hasn't left you feedback. I apologize a ton for that. To make up for his negligence, I'll be reviewing your piece instead. :) Also, for your troubles, I'll read another piece of your choice as well, if you wish.
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On to the review, I've read this piece before, and as I stated, it's one of my favorites. It's a great song that I'm sure would speak to many. It's catchy as well as moving and that's a feat in and of itself.

The only 'errors' in this, that I found, were on a few lines, you forgot to capitalize the first word, but other than that, it's flawless. Bravo!
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BetweenBloodyLines Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
:heart:I love it:heart:
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, and also thanks for the fav.
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BetweenBloodyLines Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012
you're welcoem for both :p
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RollingTomorrow Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for participating in our prompt at #Live-Love-Write! :iconlachoirplz:

You did a good job with the flow of this piece.

Keep up the good work!


*TheFinalHikari
Founder of #Writers--club, #LandoftheSky, and #Live-Love-Write
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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MikiraWolf Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this, it's not insanely descriptive, but it doesn't need to be. It's something people can relate to.
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Darkmatter987 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Deepest cut so far, drawn another scar its a very simple great line i love it.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, glad you like it.
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CROSSPHYER Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Just so you don't think I forgot to check your work out. ;)

I like this one. I haven't read a lot of your stuff, but from what I've seen this one seems to have more... direction? to it. Anyway, nice work.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I write most of my stuff at emotional times, so it's possible some are a bit messy :P
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Suchimupanku Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it, thanks I needed that.
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isasongs Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you like it.
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Suchimupanku Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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